Flash Fiction Friday — The Storm

This week’s Flash Fiction Friday Prompt:

“As she rose from the garden, dusting the earth from her hands on her worn jeans, she looked up at the sky and knew — a storm was approaching.”

THE STORM

As she rose from the garden, dusting the earth from her hands on her worn jeans, she looked up at the sky and knew – a storm was approaching.

The charged air pressed and pulled her skin, and created a taut anxiety in her chest.  In the distance, across acres of corn fields and forgotten dirt roads, she could observe the growing tempest, dark and dangerous.  Gray clouds coalesced into imposing thunderheads, and rough wind shook the leaves of the trees.

The sun shone yet above her, but not for long – she understood that now.  She bent to pick up her spade, and returned it to its assigned place in the potting shed.  The wind bore through the slats of rough wood, rattling trays of ceramic pots stacked precariously high on the shelf above her work counter.

yellow-50326_640From the shelter of the shed door she watched the first drops of rain pelt the mound of freshly turned soil.  She’d dug deep, deeper than necessary, and soon the water and wind would wash away the truth of what had been done today.  She fought the impulse to thank heaven for this small mercy, forcing her mouth to maintain a tight line across her wrinkled face.  Any help given today hadn’t come from above — of that she was certain.

An old pickup, dented from years of farm service, pulled into the driveway.   She watched the driver leap from the vehicle, and run across the wide expanse of yard toward her.   His rage added inches to an already imposing height.  He howled her name as he ran, the word twisting in the wind, the battle cry of a wounded animal.  She braced her shoulders in defiant preparation.

The real storm was about to begin.

 

Thank you for reading.  Here’s are some ways you can help keep this feature going:

  1. Submit a first line suggestion for next week in the comments section.  No obscenities, please.   Prompts will be chosen at random, lottery style.  
  2. Come back to Bright Tuesday next Friday to find out which suggested first line was chosen, and to read the next Flash Fiction Friday story (750 words or less). 
  3. I appreciate constructive criticism, so please offer your thoughts and opinions in the comments.

Fiction Writers:  You are invited to write your own story using today’s prompt to post on your own blog.  Please include a link back to this post, and leave a link to your story in the comments section.  Doing so allows participating authors to read and comment on each other’s work, and also helps readers find new authors to enjoy. 

 

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13 thoughts on “Flash Fiction Friday — The Storm

  1. Oh no you don’t…no, no, no…I want more. You’ve got some ‘splainin’ to do, Lucy! (Are you too young to get that? If you are, I’m just going to leave you hanging until I get a chance to wrangle the rest of this story out of you.)

    But I can’t post this comment without saying — good job!

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    1. Of course I get that! I’m a red-blooded American, aren’t I? 🙂
      I’m pleased you enjoyed it enough to wonder what’s going to happen next. I have some ideas to continue the story, but I haven’t decided if I will or not yet…

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    1. Thank you!
      Yes, your line is perfect! Come back next Friday to see what prompt is used for the next story. I pick them at random, “lottery” style. Thanks for taking part. 🙂

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  2. Very nicely set up! I had a pretty clear idea what was about to happen after your narration ended.

    My suggestion for a line is: “He had told her not to do it.”

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    1. I appreciate your feedback. This was the my first attempt to write a story in under 300 words. I knew it would be challenging, but it was even harder than I thought it would be.
      Great line suggestion — I am already thinking of a few different directions I could go with it.

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